Dear Shell,
I'm working on the revision/rewrite/editing on Hideaway Inn, as I think I've mentioned in a post before this. I'm looking at changing the beginning of the story. This is the possible beginning:
Long white candles burned, the flames flickering eerily against the shadows of the room. The lone occupant of the room crossed over to a small ornate wooden chest on the fireplace mantle. Reaching into her pocket, she pulled out golden key. With a sigh, she glanced over her shoulder at the circle of clear crystals on the hardwood floor before turning back to the chest. The key slid easily into the lock, turned smoothly. She paused again before lifting the lid.
“I hope this is worth it.” She muttered in a low voice.
A soft glow came from within the chest. Her hand dipped into the chest and pulled out a fist-sized, smooth onyx crystal. The crystal felt warm in her hand, the warmth seeming to pulse with her heartbeat.
That is what I have so far, I'm looking at how to incorporate it into the current beginning.
Shell
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